#1
This has music to go with it, but let me know what you think of it without the backing music.

A city is silenced... in the midst of night
As he watches in fear... at the dreading sight
He ponders existence... in his own mind
While the trouble grows near... heroes take flight

Lives, lost
Running, scared
Hope, fades
Despair, fills the air

Hate was bred
Pain is bled
As people panic
The sky falls down
Death has come
So run away
Take your soul
It can't be saved

But... as the world crashes down, on me
I see
We... we must fight, to defend
Our heaven

You, come
Hit, run
Hide, deny
As we, overcome

A city is silenced, in the midst of night
As he watches in fear, at the dreading sight
He ponders existence, in his own mind
While the trouble grows near, heroes take flight

Hate was bred and
Pain is bled
As people panic
The sky falls down and
Death has come
So run away and
Take your soul
Before it's replaced

But... as the world crashes down on me
I see
We... we will fight, to defend
Our heaven
But... as the world crashes down on me
I see
We... we will fight, to defend
Our heaven

Hate was bred and
Pain is bled
As people panic
The sky falls down and
Death has come
So run away and
Take your soul
It can't be replaced
Last edited by Shutout at Dec 18, 2008,
#3
edit button is your friend.

the line breaks got rather annoying. makes it look a bit too fragmented and doesn't help the reader. overall, however, i think this could be a good strong song with some backing music. last stanza is good, if slightly overdone.
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