#1
Never posted here but long time follower . Anyway I thought I would have a bash at a bit of songwriting (it's bloody hard). So here is my first attempt so it might be rubbish. here goes.

Verse
There was a time,
when I was free from,
All this pain and suffering,
but now it seems that i'm stricken
And can't find an end to all this grief.

Chorus x1
I can't find my place
I can't figure out
how to grasp my goal
and replace this ever blackening hole.

Verse
I'm reaching out for help
but all you seem to do is push me
back to a dark place that I cannot break
and it's killing me trying
but I know I gotta keep going.

Chorus x2
I can't find my place
I can't figure out
how to grasp my goal
and replace this ever blackening hole.
which my soul once fulfilled (2nd time)

Verse
This disease I feel inside
Is destined to leave
now that i've found my absolution
from what once was a stronghold of tribulation.

Chorus x2
I've found my place
I can feel the fortitude
developing in my soul
so now I can reach my goal.
now i've found my absolution. (2nd time)


Comments and criticism is welcome
Anyway enjoy .
#2
Its simple, but its effective, i like it, work a little on making it more hinting rather than blunt, but i like it

please c4c my Conjunctions and Chemical Reactions Piece.