#1
I know this will not recieve any literary fame but i am so pleased ,so i had to share.
I've been a UG member for quite sometime and i have enjoyed the tabs first then i found this forum which has started me writing again.(I used to write poetry years ago)
Over the last week I have churned out some lines trying to get to a song but they have been just that 'lines'
but at last something has clicked
please read,its by no means finished (and may be crap) but i will explain.


As I sit here
I wonder where I'm from
Am I accepted
Do I really belong
Well this is new to me
A life I've never known
And you being true to me
Giving me this home

I wanna hold you

Like never before

Really wanna hold you close

Till you need no more

chorus(ithink)

And when you look
real close
I know you see who I am
And when you look
Real close
I know that I'm your man


Right I know its cheesy but the reason i'm so happy is i've recorded myself singing it (on my phone) and it works as a song. The words don't really matter so much(just to me),its just that when i sing it it sounds like a song.I know it's just the first part but for the first time I can see a place to build from.
Thanks for looking

any replies would be greatfully recieved.

cheers
#2
Pop rock FTW. Its got structure and hooks. I like it, you shoud write more often.
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#3
Quote by PopPunkPotHead
Pop rock FTW. Its got structure and hooks. I like it, you shoud write more often.


Thanks sohooo much
I would have finished it anyway but but I was expecting to be shot down for the fact it is very POP rock.

cheers and I'm bubbling with enthusiasm.

many more too come(I hope)
#4
It works, and doesn't suck, what more could you possibly ask for? ha ha, it really is quite good, and I did enjoy reading it, fantastic work for someone who hasn't written in a very long time! if you could have a look at "twelve walls" for me, the links in my sig but again, very nice work!