#1
This is the first real piece that I've posted in here, and the first thing I've felt comfortable sharing with anyone for a while so here goes.

Drawing is about seeing,
Seeing is looking at what's there.
Your enlightenment was only a one day affair
seeing as your perscription for solitude, happiness
and safety only allowed two refills.

Drawing is thinking,
Thinking is rarely popular.
A moment frozen in time exchanged
for silence and the abuse of a
less than favorable past.
Reliving what's been done
doesn't make you a timetraveller.

Drawing is feeling,
feeling is something you don't want anymore.
Tossed away like a half eaten lunch,
but you never did share anyway.

-Wiz?
#4
"Drawing is about seeing"
Change this to "Drawing is seeing", to make it fit with the rest of the piece.

"seeing as your prescription for solitude, happiness"
Note the spelling. I didn't like the repetition of "seeing", as you already used it twice, but now in a different context.

"Tossed away like a half eaten lunch,
but you never did share anyway."
I'm not sure if I'm a fan of the anti-climatic ending. We'll see, I'll be re-reading this.

The rest was brilliant. Although I couldn't really pick out a flow for it, try reading it aloud and see if there are any unnecessary/needed syllables in each line.

Great.

See the above post for bumping, critiquing, etc. I'm not asking for a crit back, I haven't posted anything here for a few weeks, but be ready to return other peoples comments.