#1
(SOLO)
Why haven't You realized
That you've been traveling in circles
Since you were killed in war
Because you were sent into a grudge match
To fight for an unnecessary cause
And sacrifice your life for nothing
What ever did you do to deserve such a sentence
Nothing at all
THIS IS A SONG FOR THE DEAD AND BROKEN
AN ODE TO ALL THE PAIN YOU SUFFERED
AND ALL I CAN THINK OF TO SAY TO YOU
IS THIS...:
ALL THE PAIN IS OVER
YOU CAN REST SAFELEY IN YOUR GRAVE
THERE'S NO ONE TO HURT YOU NOW
AND THERE'S NOTHING WE CAN DO FOR YOU
(PREVERSE)
For all the spirits wondering around the battlefield
You may now rest in peace and assured
That this will never happen again
The new cheif has sworn to get you out of there
And for those who are still alive
You must pay your respects for your brothers and sisters
For you may one day join them
But not for many years fortunately for you
THIS IS A SONG FOR THE DEAD AND BROKEN
AN ODE TO ALL THE PAIN YOU SUFFERED
AND ALL I CAN THINK OF TO SAY TO YOU
IS THIS...:
ALL THE PAIN IS OVER
YOU CAN REST SAFELEY IN YOUR GRAVE
THERE'S NO ONE TO HURT YOU NOW
AND THERE'S NOTHING WE CAN DO FOR YOU
(BRIDGE)
(BREAKDOWN)
(SOLO)
(RE - INTRO)
Why haven't You realized
That you've been traveling in circles
Since you were killed in war
Because you were sent into a grudge match
To fight for an unnecessary cause
And sacrifice your life for nothing
What ever did you do to deserve such a sentence
Nothing at all
THIS IS A SONG FOR THE DEAD AND BROKEN
AN ODE TO ALL THE PAIN YOU SUFFERED
AND ALL I CAN THINK OF TO SAY TO YOU
IS THIS...:
ALL THE PAIN IS OVER
YOU CAN REST SAFELEY IN YOUR GRAVE
THERE'S NO ONE TO HURT YOU NOW
AND THERE'S NOTHING WE CAN DO FOR YOU

these r the lyrics to a song i wrote hope u like crit for crit, constructive crit only thanks
#2
hey im new at this too so dont fault me too much if i said something wrong,

firstly, i think you should have done a spell check =X

secondly, i dont think the preverse is good ><
"The new cheif has sworn to get you out of there
And for those who are still alive"
this line sounds out of place...

other than that, nice job and keep on writing!

C4C if u can..

My lyrics

December- https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1027599
Last edited by CantReadTabs at Dec 22, 2008,