#1
You've got your handful of change
I've got all night
Head full of compliments
"you're eyes are like Everest..."
No that doesn't sound right
Your smile wide like a sprinter, crossing the finish line
You've been running your whole life
So you know what it's like to fall, and no matter how often, lift yourself up one more time

And I was beaten from the start but didn't know till the end
So I ran for my life like it was mine to defend

Kill the lights, kill our shadows
We don't need them anymore
I've found someone else to follow me around
This time i'm sure
I lost all that I had
But everything I need
Is curled up in a ball on the floor

You've got your pockets full of poise
I'm nervous like my first time
Mind so full of memories
"you lived this is a dream, you're going to be just fine"
Your smile sewn like a sweater, kept me warm all night
You've been a boxer all your life
So you know what it's like to take a hit, just hit back one more time

And I was beaten from the start, but didn't know it till the end
So I fought for my life, but I was swinging at my friends
I thought i'd lost it all when you had me tangled in your web
But you set me free and promised you'd be here until the end

Kill the lights, kill our shadows
We don't need them anymore
I've found someone else to follow me around
This time i'm sure
I lost all that I had
But everything I need
Is curled up in a ball on the floor
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#2
Woah. That's a nice piece dude.

It's got a lot to say, and i think you worded it very well. Some parts feel a little squeezed in and somehwat out of place, but overall its great.
#5
I think this is my favorite from you (from what I've read, of course).

Loved it, man.
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#6
The poeticness is very nice, but part of it seems so played off already. The portion about running, and picking yourself up... it's so... well... done before.
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#7
"So I ran for my life like it was mine to defend"
"Pockets full of poise"

Those two lines are spectacular. On the whole, this was pretty enjoyable. "You're" should be "your" in the first stanza. The guy above me is right in saying that running and lifting yourself up again is a particularly overused image, though.
#8
Pipe Smokin' Cubans! Corey, you're right about that 'you're' being 'your', I don't know how I missed that. Thanks for taking a look man.

J-niz thanks a lot for reading my stuff and rooster, I know what you mean but I don't know if I can change it...
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