#1
this is the first song i ever wrote and its been sitting in my guitar case for quite some time. i'm finally gonna get it together and maybe record it for her.
so i need some critiqueing and it will be much appreciated.
the song is simple using three chords in the verses (c#m, a,e) and those three plus a b chord in the chorus. I think its gonna have a john mayer like sound so just imagine him singing it. and i cant get the chords to line up rite but at least you'll know what they are. the a and e chords finish up every other line in the verses, and c#m and a chords finish up every other line in the chorus except the last line which goes back to the verses chord progression.

INTRO: c#m, a, e

VERSE 1

c#m
I love your eyes
a e
and i love your smile
c#m a e
and i love the way you look at me with those big blue eyes
c#m a e
and wherever i go or whatever i do
c#m a e
the only thing on my mind, baby is you

CHORUS

b
And your eyes are like an ocean
INTRO: c#m, a, e

VERSE 1

c#m
I love your eyes
a e
and i love your smile
c#m a e
and i love the way you look at me with those big blue eyes
c#m a e
and wherever i go or whatever i do
c#m a e
the only thing on my mind, baby is you

CHORUS

b
And your eyes are like an ocean
a e
i wanna crash into me
b
and your face is like an angel
a e
that i always wanna see
b a e
and girl wherever you are is where i wanna be
c#m a e
cause baby you know your the only girl for me

VERSE 2

c#m
I could see you every day
a e
and it would never be to soon
c#m
cause your sparkling blue eyes
a e
can light up a room
c#m a e
and girl you know i wanna sweep you off your feet
c#m a e
but every time i see you my heart skips a beat
c#m a e
and right now baby i hope you know how i feel
c#m a e
baby right now you got me head over heels


CHORUS

b
And your eyes are like an ocean
c#m a
i want to crash into me
b
and your face is like an angel
c#m a
that i always wanna see
b c#m a
and wherever you are is where i wanna be
c#m a e
cause baby you know your the only girl for me

(i guess this part is a bridge)

b c#m a
Girl you have no idea the things you do to me
b c#m a
Baby wherever you are is where i wanna be
c#m a e
and whenever i leave i wish i could stay
b c#m a
and whenever i'm away from you i miss you every day
b c#m a
and i know we feel so far away
c#m a e
but baby you know i love you anyway

CHORUS
b
And your eyes are like an ocean
c#m a
i want to crash into me
b
and your face is like an angel
c#m a
that i always wanna see
b c#m a
and wherever you are is where i wanna be
c#m a e
cause baby you know your the only girl for me


VERSE 2

c#m
I could see you every day
a e
and it would never be to soon
c#m
cause your sparkling blue eyes
a e
can light up a room
c#m a e
and girl you know i wanna sweep you off your feet
c#m a e
but every time i see you my heart skips a beat
c#m a e
and right now baby i hope you know how i feel
c#m a e
baby right now you got me head over heels


CHORUS

b
And your eyes are like an ocean
c#m a
i want to crash into me
b
and your face is like an angel
c#m a
that i always wanna see
b c#m a
and wherever you are is where i wanna be
c#m a e
cause baby you know your the only girl for me

(i guess this part is a bridge)

b c#m a
Girl you have no idea the things you do to me
b c#m a
Baby wherever you are is where i wanna be
c#m a e
and whenever i leave i wish i could stay
b c#m a
and whenever i'm away from you i miss you every day
b c#m a
and i know we feel so far away
c#m a e
but baby you know i love you anyway

CHORUS
b
And your eyes are like an ocean
c#m a
i want to crash into me
b
and your face is like an angel
c#m a
that i always wanna see
b c#m a
and wherever you are is where i wanna be
c#m a e
cause baby you know your the only girl for me
dave matthews might.. just.. be.. god..

Quote by gregs1020
yes, pointing it at your head will send the sound towards your head.


it's the same with guns too, before you go testing that one.
#2
how old r u?
'64 Fender Telecaster
'08 Epiphone Prophecy EM-2
'06 Epiphone Les Paul-100
'08 Squier Strat Mini
'03 Ibanez AEG10
'90 Yamaha FG730S
'31 Kay Archkraft
#3
17
dave matthews might.. just.. be.. god..

Quote by gregs1020
yes, pointing it at your head will send the sound towards your head.


it's the same with guns too, before you go testing that one.
#4
it's decent
your girlfriend should like it
but don't expect sex 4 it...
'64 Fender Telecaster
'08 Epiphone Prophecy EM-2
'06 Epiphone Les Paul-100
'08 Squier Strat Mini
'03 Ibanez AEG10
'90 Yamaha FG730S
'31 Kay Archkraft
#5
ha that wasnt what i was going for anyway
dave matthews might.. just.. be.. god..

Quote by gregs1020
yes, pointing it at your head will send the sound towards your head.


it's the same with guns too, before you go testing that one.
#6
any serious advice? any1?
dave matthews might.. just.. be.. god..

Quote by gregs1020
yes, pointing it at your head will send the sound towards your head.


it's the same with guns too, before you go testing that one.