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Forgiving Tears

I wrote this to my dad who passed away a few years ago. He was an alcoholic, but despite that, he was the most caring and loving father ever.
I wrote this with every inch of my heart. So I really want to hear your views on how to improve it, to make it sound as good as possible.

I'm Danish, so there might be a few spelling errors. Feel free to correct me all the places that I've messed up

[Intro]

A life in sin all the way through
My love for you still remained true
An entire life built on a lie
Was torn apart the night I saw you cry

[Bridge]

You fought yourself but you lost
A child's life was the cost
A thousand ways to end the pain
I've lived my life in eternal rain

Of all the times that you've tried
And all the times that I've cried
We'll meet again when the rainy skies
Opens the path to heaven for my eyes

[Solo]

An ocean of tears made me see
The endless love you shared with me
And now I know the most important part
Is that you're always there in my heart

Of all the times that you've tried
And all the times that I've cried
We'll meet again when the rainy skies
Opens the path to heaven for my eyes

[Outro]

And when you're watching from a cloud
I hope one day I will make you proud
Last edited by ArmSpasms at Dec 25, 2008,
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Quote by ArmSpasms
Forgiving Tears

I wrote this to my dad who passed away a few years ago. He was an alcoholic, but despite that, he was the most caring and loving father ever.
I wrote this with every inch of my heart. So I really want to hear your views on how to improve it, to make it sound as good as possible.

I'm Danish, so there might be a few spelling errors. Feel free to correct me all the places that I've messed up

[Intro]

A life in sin all the way through
My love for you was still true
An entire life build (Should be spelled built as past-tense) on a lie
Was torn apart the night I saw you cry

[Bridge]

You fought yourself but you lost
A child's life was the cost
A thousand ways to end the pain
I've lived my life in eternal rain

Of all the times that you've tried
Of all the times that I've cried
We'll meet again when the cloudy skies
Opens the path to heaven for my eyes

[Solo]

An ocean of tears made me see
The endless love you shared with me
And now I know the most important part
Is that you're always there in my heart

Of all the times that you've tried
Of all the times that I've cried
We'll meet again when the rainy skies
Opens the path to heaven for my eyes

[Outro]

And when you're watching from a cloud
I hope one day I will make you proud


Its a very simple rhyme scheme, but WOW! this is an awesome song! It would be a great ballad.
Whats a sig?