#1
Wrote those about six months ago... probably most heartful thing I've ever written

Simple feelings found only in the bottom of the bottle,
The familiar scent of your poison,
Injected, snorted, smoked, the relaxation,
Disturbed only by self brought damnation,

Trial and error,
Judgment clouded, despair closes in,
Shunning all but the powder,
The substance,
The source of your pain

Through the haze of self deception, fooling only those most forgone,
Those in need,
Those in need,
Those now dead

How wrong we were to find solace in vileness, your heart ripped out with every passing moment,
Wasted opportunities,
Mind lost to the darkness,
And soul not far behind

How can each day pass when all you despise stares back at you in the mirror?
Laughing at your pathetic attempts,
Laughing at your cowering,
Laughing as you cut,
Only now does the laughing quiet,
Replaced by the tears,
The mind flashes images of the young boy laughing and smiling,
Now never to smile again

Lying on the floor as his regrets spill out of him unto the floor,
His last move on Hell…
Wiping the tears from his eyes.



Sanity is not statistical
#2
Pretty good. I'm not quite sure what you are singing about. It seemed to me like a drugattic who realized he couldn't fix his mistakes and kill himself.

Anyway I was hoping you could listen to my song Mindslave in the Songwriting forum.

Ps. METAL UP YOUR ASS
#3
Quote by Silas S Thompso
Pretty good. I'm not quite sure what you are singing about. It seemed to me like a drugattic who realized he couldn't fix his mistakes and kill himself.

Anyway I was hoping you could listen to my song Mindslave in the Songwriting forum.

Ps. METAL UP YOUR ASS


bingo. a junkie who is so far gone, he can't deal with it anymore and ends it. most of it is a self description, apart from the junkie part



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#6
Quote by guitar_loser
good job


thanks man, first song ive ever actually written and then shown people. Thanks for all the positive feedback guys, it means a lot to me. I'm gunna start posting more up here... I was half expecting stupid pit monkey responses, but since I haven't I am gunna be here a lot more



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