First off, I would have probably used the Neck pickup if I were you, gives more warmness.
And for some reason the strumming part is out of sync.
How exactly did you record this ?

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I recorded it in the morning and i was tired xD. and i can record a new one with the neck pickup. i didnt think about that. and the strumming part i dont always get in sync, u got any tips?
A little rough in some places. You could work on your strumming as has been said. The solo could use a little cleaning...and distortion? It sounds good overall though!

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Not bad mate. I can only echo the other comments people have made, again in particular using the neck pickup for a warmer tone.

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