#1
Caged up in a fiery sweat,
body is shaking and it's not over yet.
Screaming out at sights unseen.
Delusional rantings of a cold mind in need.

Cut me loose while I lose my head.
Banshees are screaming now to wake up the dead.
Dim light down on skin so pale.
Lantern is burning, then the light starts to fail.

Shadows move just out of sight.
Bodies are burning to fend off the night.
The moon sits shrouded behind the smoke,
and the wolves all howl at this morbid joke.

Seeing all this through dreary mist
I bow down my head for the Reaper's kiss.
Body stills as vison fades.
I relinquish my grip to the stalking shades
#2
It's alright, not particularly my style, but it certainly works. Good imagery all the way, but I'd suggest taking a look at the last sequence in the first stanza...

Screaming out at sights unseen.
Delusional rantings of a cold mind in need.

Now there are two things I don't like about it, one the rhyme is just so forced... It seems like a stretch to me, and it doesn't seem to work. Two, it just doesn't work with the tempo... It seems off to me.

You really have to watch your tempo in this one, it seems like it's all over the place especially in the second stanza. Try to get it to flow better by cutting a bit from the lines that are longer.

Otherwise it's pretty good.

P.S. If you're going to go C4C, I'd love one on my poem called, "I married my depression"