#1
Eh little bit of words I wrote down

Every minute of every day, people's lives are taken away
Stories I read, stories I hear - leave me breathless and without a word to say
Except

I'm alright but it's all wrong... it won't be long
til we will be singin' our own song... just hold on, it won't be long....

I have a chord progression goin' as well.

Criticism please? I know it's only short but it's a start eh.

Cheers.
#2
It is short... I don't know what you're going to do with it, but I like it. I mean there's only one flaw I can find in it. When you say

Leave me breathless and without a word to say

It's just not following your tempo. It seems to drag a bit and you should try to cut it down a bit, but still try to get your message across.

Other than that, I like it.

P.S. I'd love a crit on my piece I married my depression if you have time.