#1
So i normally dont write lyrics or something but i thought i would give it a try :P
Anyway im far from completing it but i just wanted to show you what i got and ask what you guys think about it.
Its about a boring day and turning it into a good(wild, happy, all that stuff) one.
And when the taste of food is a bit weak you add pepper to make it more special.
So thats the erh, ''idea'' behind the song

Here it is:

Another boring day
What do we have to say
Everything seems to be
Nothing special at all
And there is only one solution
To this originality pollution
Take out the chillie’s
Make your day
And let the boredom pay

Chorus(x2)
Just add some pepper
It makes everything better
Just add some more spice
It makes you role the dice

What you guys think?
#2
it could be more original, it's a little cheesy. and it could be more catchy.
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Last edited by Iron_Maiden§ at Jan 3, 2009,
#3
Not too shabby for what appears to be a first try. Don't freak too much on rhyme and meter. Find something a bit more real. Whether its about something that frustrates you or something good. If it frustrates you, write about that then how things could be. A Dark-Light song sequence. It adds much texture. Keep trying though, you'll get the hang of it.
#4
First timer?
Good for that atleast.
Im assuming this is meant to be a catchy type of song.

Another boring day
What do we have to say
Everything seems to be
Nothing special at all
And there is only one solution
To this originality pollution
Take out the chillie’s
Make your day
And let the boredom pay

This part has too much of a boring feel to it.
Every line has the same feel to it.
You might want to change it up a bit.

Chorus(x2)
Just add some pepper
It makes everything better
Just add some more spice
It makes you role the dice

For a chorus like this its best to change it up on the second half instead of saying the same thing twice.
Example
Just add some pepper
It makes everything better
Just add some more spice
It makes you role the dice
Just add some pepper
If it makes you feel better
Just add some spice
Untill the current will Sufice <- spelling is definately off on that word there.

all in all a good first attempt.