#3
I liked it for a metalcore song. It did what it set out to do very well. I'm not a _huge_ fan of the genre, however i'll listen to it readily : )

The only bits I didn't really like was the bridge (i think it was the bridge) that sounded exactly like Bullet For My Valentine. Bar 38-40 ish. The other main problem was the use of practically the same chord progression all the way through. Mix it up a bit!

Also, the bass was a tad boring.

There were a lot of things good in this song (particularly the solos and breakdown sort of thing).I don't want you to thing it was all negative. I just listed that parts that could be improved.

If you want to crit, and I don't mind either way, crit here.

Cheers : )
#4
I hear some ATREYU influence. It's a little too familiar though. Still, nice work.


EDIT: Woa, that was totally stolen from B4MV. The entire pre-solo and solo! WTF man?
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nice discovery, sir.


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#5
hahaha, what needs to be said is i was the main guy that wrote the song (others are too lazy) and yes i have been listening to lots of bfmv and im starting to get into atreyu a lot just now as well, guess i goes to show that what your listening to at the time really influences what you write.

thanks for the comments guys
#6
what song and what riff was that stolen from, it sounds like suffocating under words to me but it isnt stolen?
#7
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what song and what riff was that stolen from, it sounds like suffocating under words to me but it isnt stolen?

It pretty much is. The riff is just a little different, but most of the solo, including the backing parts, is basically a rendition of Words of Sorrow.
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when i grow up i wanna have blackandsilver's babies!

Quote by angusfan16

Quote by Scowmoo
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HOLY HELL.

nice discovery, sir.


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#8
i can see where your coming from definately, we will defo make changes to the song, and ill re-post the changes when there done, thanks very much