#1
Made last night (:
I'm debating on taking the last line out... I like it but I think it thows it off abit D; ..


Two Lives; In one you’re made, Other you create.

If you don’t act like them,
You’re categorized in the nothing folder
If you’re not considered a them,
They’ll never be your crying shoulder

So sharpen your look,
Buy yourself a pretty face
Don’t get all shook,
They’ll notice you’re not at their pace

Don’t let others take you down
Don’t let others be your frowns
You are what you want to be
Don’t let others be your voice
Don’t let others make your choices
You are what you live to be


If you don’t dress like them,
They give you judgemental stares, so stern
If you don’t talk like them,
Your voice shouldn’t be heard

So sharpen your look,
Buy yourself a pretty face
Don’t get all shook,
They’ll notice you’re not at their pace

Chorus

If you aren’t like them
Life isn’t complete in your eyes
Everyone tries to be like them
But everyone’s becoming lies

Chorus

Don’t live up to “them”, live up to something you wont regret
Last edited by CreeperMuffin at Jan 5, 2009,
#2
I liked this, but I thought parts of it were kinda cliche lol (Don’t let others take you down/Don’t let others be your frowns/You are what you want to be/Don’t let others be your voice/Don’t let others make your choices/You are what you live to be). Other than that I thought it was excellent.

and yeah, the last line didnt do it for me. care to crit mine? dragons breath and starlight lol.
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#3
Yeah I know. xD I'm into corny/cliche stuff, so don't hate : P
Thanks (:
Last edited by CreeperMuffin at Jan 5, 2009,