#1
Well, for the most part I am done, but a few parts of the song kind of don't sound right to me..
Mainly the "Over in an instant..." part.
Any suggestions/criticism on how to make this better?

No Tomorrow

Lights blared from the distance,
Then I focused my vision.
Revealed was infliction,
body torn apart upon collision.

Visions before me,
burn through my eyes,
times of joy and sorrow,
I had so much to live for,
but there's no tomorrow.

Caught in a void of black,
I'm not able to see,
but it plays through my head,
then I slip without a plea

Visions before me,
burn through my eyes,
times of joy and sorrow,
I had so much to live for,
but there's no tomorrow.
There's no tomorrow..

Over in an instant,
why didn't I listen,
to the voices all around.
Told me not to go,
even though I did
And that's the way it'll all end!

Wish I could take it all back,
and undo what I did..

Visions before me,
burn through my eyes,
times of joy and sorrow,
I had so much to live for,
but there's no tomorrow.
#2
Well, I have a few parts I'm not satisfied with, but that mostly the style of writing. If you have it a mostly-concrete form keep it that way. I do think that you should start the fifth stanza over again, just keeping the first line. The problem there is that it completely breaks the flow of the song, which is precarious already.
Well that was all a bit harsh, but I hope you are able to improve your piece!