#1
Hey this is my first song please let me know what you guys think of it so i can make it better im not quite sure what i was going for. its supposed to be in the style of blink 182 but i just wanted it to be different as well. thanks for any comments :P


Guitar Intro

Bass Intro

Vocal Intro (Simple Guitar and bass line during introduction)

Chorus (Faster Bass line and faster strummed Guitar)

Line 2 (Back to Basic Guitar from introduction)

Chorus (Same as First time with guitar and bass but speeded up during ending)

Solo (Simple solo but catchy)

Line 3 (Closes the song)

Slow guitar whilst bass fades out then single strike on guitar ends the song.


Lyrics

Introduction
What happened to you?
Before you left,
I thought we had it all,

You had other ideas,
A fear of commitment,
No reason to call.


Chorus
You started to explain,
But I wouldn’t let you.

Your reasons why,
Weren’t so catchy,

Tried to talk you round,
Tried to tell you but you wouldn’t listen,
Now I miss you.

You packed your bags now you’re gone,
I tried to tell you your decision was wrong,

Now am standing here just as sketchy,
Thinking of reasons why you left me.


Line 2
You phoned me up 3 days later,
Telling me, that I was the traitor,
With your false Accusations why I was gone,
I was away on business, your reasons were wrong.


Line 3
You came back, a week later,
I couldn’t take it,
You were the traitor,

I closed this song in my failing,
To take you back,
We couldn’t make it.

Please pull it apart and say what you think
jamie
Last edited by jamieb177 at Jan 7, 2009,
#3
Wow, I read the first like and thought ITS TOM DELONGE!
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#4
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