#1
Streets for the violence,
And sex paying the prostitutes,
A gun for every family,
But just one bullet will do.

To break the strongest bond,
Under a tide of desperation,
A longing for what was once here,
But has long since moved on.

If this city reminds you,
Of a cup of pain and sorrow,
With the trigger pulling moment,
Being the one that hurt most,

To take one step was futile,
But to take a leap would surely miss,
The pace at which to move on,
Another urban myth.

To make any move was foolish,
The gap of error to wide,
But it doesn't really matter anymore,
'Cause our cities been left behind.
Further than you or I can see,
Far, Far, Behind.
a circle of filth all around the world.
-lifetech.
Last edited by Lifetech at Jan 10, 2009,
#2
I thought this was really good. I'm very tired at the moment so i didnt make too much sense of all of it, but it was still great.
#4
nice dude it was really really good. id love to hear how the finished product sounds. send me a link when your done please
#5
Sure thing, might be a while though.
a circle of filth all around the world.
-lifetech.
#6
Streets for the violence,
And sex paying the prostitutes,
A gun for every family,
But just one bullet will do.
second line im not to sre of the meaning but besides that this is a good stanza
To break the strongest bond,
Under a tide of desperation,
A longing for what was once here,
But has long since moved on.
second line is the best in the stanza
If this city reminds you,
Of a cup of pain and sorrow,
With the trigger pulling moment,
Being the one that hurt most,
i didnt like the first two lines at all..but the last two were the highlght of the song in my eyes
To take one step was futile,
But to take a leap would surely miss,
The pace at which to move on,
Another urban myth.
loved it
To make any move was foolish,
The gap of error to wide,
But it doesn't really matter anymore,
'Cause our cities been left behind.
Further than you or I can see,
Far, Far, Behind.
all good, but i believe it would sound better without the last two lines... its kinda taking the band away from the ending


overall
good work

keep on keepin' on
c4c
Reaching for the sun
one may forget
the feet which
ground him
#7
Some good feedback there, thanks.
a circle of filth all around the world.
-lifetech.