#1
Any help or comments would be appreciated. The dots are where I don't know what words to put, so if you could help me with that it'd be cool. Thanks.

into the dark abyss, ive locked myself
in this unforgiving prison of hate and remorse
the key to save me from my misery
is drenched with blood and ................

the ring of fire left when your soul disappeared
has dragged me into this monochromatic life
but the love that entered my heart when you appeared
has led me forever to abandon the knife

nothing in this world matters anymore,
but my passion for you, my dear
I'd be falling from sorrow and landing in pity
if it wasn't for you being here

reliving the same day has never been so hard
each one i live is like another broken shard,
of glass in the back of difference,
I need to break out of this shell.

You are the ........ that saves me from this hell!
#2
Quote by betrayedloyalty
Any help or comments would be appreciated. The dots are where I don't know what words to put, so if you could help me with that it'd be cool. Thanks.

into the dark abyss, ive locked myself
in this unforgiving prison of hate and remorse
the key to save me from my misery
is drenched with blood and ................

Hmmm...I kinda like this, but the second line doesn't really seem to flow. Maybe just "In this unforgiving prison of hate"? I'm unsure. But the rest of it seems pretty good and maybe that last line where you were unsure could be "Is drenched with blood and disbelief", or "Is drenched with blood and bound with grief"?

the ring of fire left when your soul disappeared
has dragged me into this monochromatic life
but the love that entered my heart when you appeared
has led me forever to abandon the knife

Again the second line could be fixed a bit, mainly 'has'. It doesn't seem to go along with the first line. Maybe And?

nothing in this world matters anymore,
but my passion for you, my dear
I'd be falling from sorrow and landing in pity
if it wasn't for you being here

I like this one

reliving the same day has never been so hard
each one i live is like another broken shard,
of glass in the back of difference,
I need to break out of this shell.

You are the ........ that saves me from this hell!


This one is pretty good too, the word you couldn't think of...hmmm...maybe 'dream'?
"Ignorance runs rampant through this virus we call life, dead one day, alive the next, never breaking a stride. As I take it all in and realize, nothing we do can stop it, I release the hatred from my eyes, only to feel it within."