I think the rhythm was very much inspired from Tangerine by Led Zeppelin.

I can hardly move today
A reflection in a window of skies turned grey
I barely knew your name

Footsteps on the pebbles of years gone by
Crying of the rebels As we march, we die

There's a hundred reasons why
And I've forgotten all but one
That's nice every line of that just works so well, just need to add to it a bit now, or if you put that together that could make a good chorus
never a bad idea to be inspired by zeppelin.

this is really great, i loved every line. take your time on this, expand it but dont sacrifice quality for greater length.

this could be an amazing song, or you could keep it as it is and it would work great on an album.

if you want to crit mine its here
Emerse your soul in love

You used to be alright What happened?

Yellow tigers crouched in jungles in her Dark Eyes .