#1
This is my first time writing a song, go easy on me XD

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Intro
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In times of uncertainty we stand
As pillars of hope for those who have none

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Verse 1
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When I look outside
all I see is black

Though a flame inside
ready to combat

agianst rampant injustice
and waves of fear

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Chorus
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Steadfast we stand
agianst all odds

We Will not fail
our strength prevail

Our Resolve is unshaken
Our cause is just

the voice of the voiceless
sounds the assault

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Verse 2
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No longer deterred
by our weaknesses

they can kill our bodies
But our hearts live on

Our stance unwavering
we will overcome

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Chorus
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Steadfast we stand
agianst all odds

We Will not fail
our strength prevail

Our Resolve is unshaken
Our cause is just

Even if we are shattered
We will not give up
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#3
i loved the choruses, very well done, got your point accross, it flowed nicely, and it was poetic.

the verses seem a little short and dont seem to flow too well because of it. thier very well written though, this is great for a first song.

the only thing i would change is add a couple of lines to each verse. other than that i dont think you should drasticly change anything youve written.

if you want to crit mine its here
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1044485
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