here it is:

you've stopped ambition
before the ignition
how can you know
what you are not willing to show?
you are squaring off
only at your own loss
so lets start now
before we forget how

I dunno, it's my first thing I've ever written, so I guess I'd just like some critique if you want to give me some.
Last edited by iamnotrabid at Jan 12, 2009,
youll have to change the title or the mods will close this thread

anyway it looks like a great start just keep writing and youll do fine
Emerse your soul in love

You used to be alright What happened?

Yellow tigers crouched in jungles in her Dark Eyes .