#1
here is my lastest song, its from the point of view of like a domenatrix guy who always does this slut[ she likes to pretend he is rapeing her] but then she grows tired of it and wants him to leave her alone but he gets obsessed over her and rapes her for real and she wants him to stop but she likes it when it happens still. once again its a metal song too


I like the way you look at me
I like the way you put your trust in me
I like the way you scream in pain
I like the way you say my name
I like the way you talk on the phone
Or when I’m in your home
You don’t try to resist
You don’t even raise a fist

You know you don’t resist
You don’t even raise a fist
I like how you pretend
Your whole world is caving in
You pretend that you’re someone else
You don’t even stand up for your self
You blame it on your mental health
But you like it when you do this to yourself


Don’t resist
You wouldn’t even raise a fist
Don’t resist
You don’t even raise a fist
Don’t resist

I like when you push me away
But you know I’m here to stay
When things just don’t go your way
You break down more and more Eveready
You do everything you can to hurt me
But you should know you wanted me
I always keep on coming back
I’m oblivious to your attack

I like when you run from me
But I am the one who will be victorious
Therese no way out no way you can win
I’ve got you down and pined
You brought this on yourself
Cause for you Therese no one else
Because you always trick you’re self
Into thinking Therese no one else

Don’t resist
You wouldn’t even raise a fist
Don’t resist
You don’t even raise a fist
Don’t resist
Don’t resist
You wouldn’t even raise a fist
Don’t resist
You don’t even raise a fist
Don’t resist
Don’t resist
Don’t resist
Don’t resist
#2
The concept is...interesting . I don't like this part though:

You pretend that you’re someone else
You don’t even stand up for your self
You blame it on your mental health
But you like it when you do this to yourself


Rhyming "yourself" with "yourself"...Doesn't work really.
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#3
terrible... im sorry i know you tried rather hard but man its just saying the same thing over again.

really your concept of rape and stuff could be so misconstrued.

Try writing about the emotions of the rape or something...

then saying that you like it. oh wait. no you don't. oh now you like it again. oops i guess you didn't.

good luck...
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