#1
Ok so i have a song in our band, Us against the stars, and it's our CD's title track. Everything is really good and punchy except for the chorus and i cannot come up with anything, this is how the tabbing goes, just because my theory is wayyy too rusty

Guitar one

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------1616-----1616----------------1616-----1616---------
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-000-------000------000-000-000------000-------000-000
-000-------000------000-000-000------000-------000-000

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------1313-----1313----------------1313-----1313---------
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-000-------000------000-000-000------000-------000-000
-000-------000------000-000-000------000-------000-000

Verse 1 Guitar one

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------10p9p7-----10p9p7-----10p9p7-10p9p7-10p9p7-
-000----------000----------000--------------------------------
-000----------000----------000--------------------------------
-000----------000----------000--------------------------------

Guitar Two

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------15p14p12--------15p14p12-----15p14p12-15p14p12-15p14p12
-000----------------000-------------000-----------------------------------------
-000----------------000-------------000-----------------------------------------
-000----------------000-------------000-----------------------------------------

and i cannot come up with a chorus riff for something thats got that kind of feel

any idas or examples would be much appriciated and you'd get a spot in the booklet in thanks and credit for helping write the song
#4
lol nvm..... only thing i can suggest is listening to your inspirations and writing similar to there chorus's.


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#6
Try something more melodic for chorus. And of course, your vocal line is important too.

http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=-WupES7LHZU

Something like this. 1:14 time.
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Last edited by DarTHie at Jan 14, 2009,
#7
how about you open up your playing to something other then open chuggs and dissonance chords? youll never grow as a musician if you keep playing that kind of ****.
#8
Quote by 5150addict
how about you open up your playing to something other then open chuggs and dissonance chords? youll never grow as a musician if you keep playing that kind of ****.


You are ignorant, aren't you?
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my neew year reslosutions are not too drikn as much lol.

happy new yeeae guyas.
#9
Quote by DarTHie
You are ignorant, aren't you?

i actually agree with him, if what the TS tabbed out is the apex of his knowledge then he might want to start looking at what and how he's writing. a little theory and variety never hurt anyone.
#10
I think you can't tell a lot about a musician looking at 2 riffs he wrote. And poor guy just came here to get help, not to listen to some guy diss his favorite style of music.
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happy new yeeae guyas.
#11
Dude, telling someone to branch out in the manner you did is wrong and it just annoys people, either come in here and answer the topic, or leave and don't bother posting stuff that is purely antagonizing.

As for the TC's question. You could try for a slower feel, maybe some big long power chords with a melody over them? And either do some long screams or cleaner vocals. Also, the drums should preferably be doing some tom rolls or some repeating heavy drumming.
#12
If i was playing something as simple as that i would write a chorus that add more depth to the song instead of just keeping the same vibe of the Verse.

So After seeing the tab, i would play something that starts with the p.m. triplet followed by a nice melody and repeating that with some slight variations.

... and 5150addict is right. Expand your knowledge and you won't need to ask these type of questions.
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#13
Hmmm....maybe something like:


Guitar 1:

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Guitar 2:

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Gear

Gibson '57 Les Paul Reissue
Marshall TSL 601
EHX: Big Muff, Metal Muff, Small Stone, POG, 2880
Ibanez TS808
Voodoo Labs Microvibe
Analogman Chorus
Morley Bad Horsie II
Keeley Compressor (C4)
Nova Delay
MXR 10-band EQ
#14
you might want to get a tad more technical and melotic. bring some intrest into the chorus by having one guitar go off into a melody while the other one playing your chorus riff.
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#15
ok,as for the people that decided to assume this was the best i could write, i wrote this purely built for dissonance and clashing sounds, very hectic. I don't normall yhave issues writing chorus's and such, this ones just stumped me. I can play melody, and i can write it, i just was lost on this one piece. Calling someone else's creation **** is not a way to be constructively critical.

My band has a sound that this fits in, that dosn't mean my personal playing fits in to the box my band does. I play anything from blues to metal, and i jsut happen to choose this style to write a song.

Assumeing just make an ass out of u and me
#16
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guitar 2

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