#1
sup everyone. i write songs and i am now learning how to play guitar so i can write music for them and make it as a rock star. here's the first song i wrote and i'll post the others one in a while. the others are in the making.


Get Me Outta this Place
By Develin Johnson

(screamo)Your kingdom's crumb/ling
beneath the atmosphere
and you can't do any/thing... about it!

(normal)(chorus)But just try and find
the good in things,
sometimes it's hard,
but I think you'll make it through.

(screamo)Your friends went against you,
they stabbed you in the back,
and you can't do any/thing... to change it!

(back to chorus)

(normal)Sometimes you lose your way
and it's hard to get back on track,
but don't give up (screamo Never give up!!!)
'cause all that hard work,
all that that eeefort was for nothing (screamo nothing!!!!)

(back to chorus)

(whisper)Get me outta this place…
(louder)Get me outta this place…
(louder)Get me outta this place…
(screamo)Get me outta this place…
(screamo)Get me the heck outta this place!

(normal)I'll never find the good in things
my kingdom will fall
(screamo I'll lose my friends)
but I don't care about any of it. (screamo any of it)

(normal)Because in the end
I may have lost the battle
(screamo but I won the Waaaaaaaaaaaaar!)
because I found what
I was looking foooooooooooorrrrrrr
#2
I'm not into heavy screamo stuff lol I like the lyrics of the first two verses but I think it then goes from good to mediocre, I think if you were to put more meaning into it, it would make it better. Can you please crit the ones in my sig please? Especially Someone Else's Eyes, thanks

P.s good luck on the rock star thing!!
I defecate all over my clothes to get extra protected
Roses are Red
Violets are Bitchin
God Dammit Woman
Get Back in the Kitchen
#3
Corrected?

You haven't read the rules again, your last thread was closed for exactly the same reason that this one is going to be, the title is against the rules.

*reported*

Seriously, it takes 2 mins to read the rules man.