#1
I thought of this last night when I couldn't get to sleep, but all I could ever think of was a chorus. Any help or ideas would be appreciated. This is the chorus (By the way, it's a punkier kind of sound, like early Greenday):
Edit: Added in verse 1. This is a very slow work in progress...
Double Edit: I'm adding the rest, but I'm waiting for my ride, so I miht have to stop halfway through adding it.
[Verse 1]
How can you even deal,
with all of today's stress?
Well I have something on my mind,
that I must confess.

I can not deal with it,
at least not today!
Just for a short, little bit,
I need a getaway!

[Chorus]
Let's go where joy is sold,
in bags, and on the street.
I just hope with all my heart and soul,
that I don't get an STD.

And if you want to join the fun,
you know where I am!
(Music stops)(Chant/yell)
Let's go to Amsterdam!

[Verse 2]
People screamin, I'm still dreamin,
of my next escape.
It ain't my problem, cuz' I'm leavin',
I won't be back today!

Tell me tomorrow, of your sorrow,
tell me of your falls.
I may be back tomorrow,
I may not come back at all!

[Chorus]
Let's go where joy is sold,
in bags, and on the street.
I just hope with all my heart and soul,
that I don't get an STD.

And if you want to join the fun,
you know where I am!
(Music stops)(Chant/yell)
Let's go to Amsterdam!

[Instrumental Breakdown]

[Chorus]
Let's go where joy is sold,
in bags, and on the street.
I just hope with all my heart and soul,
that I don't get an STD.

And if you want to join the fun,
you know where I am!
I'll be in Amsterdam!
I'll be in Amsterdam!

I'll be in Amsterdam!


I'll be in Amsterdam!
Last edited by herby190 at Jan 21, 2009,
#2
seems like a fun song.

i kinda lol'd to be honest at the STD line.

i like it wanna hear the rest of it when it's done.
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#3
I added in verse 1. I've had writers block lyrically, so this is probably gonna take awhile.
#4
this could be quite a lively song, but, what made you think of the whole STD thing?
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#5
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this could be quite a lively song, but, what made you think of the whole STD thing?

I swear, it wasn't past experience

Anyways, I was trying to make it seem more obvious that the "on the streets" part meant hookers, but I'm still not sure if that's apparent...
#7
I liked this, I didnt think it had much potential to be honest when you posted just the chours, but it turned out very good, the only thing I would change is the line about the STD it kinda killed the flow during my read throughs, if you dont mind criting one of mine the links in the sig
#8
Yeah, but the STD line is the only tie I've got to the original light-hearted, funny kinda feel I had..
#10
Thanks. I too kinda get tired of all the depressing songs you find on this forum. I can barely tell the good ones from the bad ones anymore...
#11
Haha this song made me laugh =D

STD's, Amsterdam, I get the joke

You should maybe put a joke about weed in there too :P
#13
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Haha this song made me laugh =D

STD's, Amsterdam, I get the joke

You should maybe put a joke about weed in there too :P

I was thinking about it, but I couldn't think of a better way to put it in than the "joy is sold in bags" thing.


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#15
Cool, thanks. I'll be sure to upload it if me and my band ever get this down; right now we just have the lyrics, and a rough idea of the guitar parts, because the band can't get together, and I hate writing over the phone.... maybe I should show him Tuxguitar...