any criticism appreciated, this is my first go at writing a full song type thing. Still working on a melody and such so any input is welcome.

dredged from the sea
a stolen melody
carving form and figure from the dust

painted thoughts
weakened faith
elusive veil seemlessly opaque
its mundane fabric clothing every strain

born, from the tree
a swollen harmony
brightest nectar spraying rivers in the sky

shed art
from the hand
falls to canvas, reflections in the sand
nourishing details whilst churning stillness