'K so I have a starting verse, but don't know where to go from there. I'm trying to capture this moment where a boy see's his girlfriend in between class, and there's this rush of excitement, they get to touch/hold each other, then the bell suddenly rings and they're cut off.

here's what I've got so far:

With your back pressed up firmly against the cold painted wall,
our hands meet either side and slide into position,
clench tight and they lock while our eyes never fall,
and we fall into an almost comatic* condition,

my neck ever so slightly bends down to your height,
"I love you," you whispered, "I love you," you listened,
the sudden ringing cuts us off till later tonight,
"I love you," I whispered, "I love you," you listened.

The * was cause I'm not sure if this is a word, haha . I mean it as in "in a coma".

Yeah just wondering if anyone had any ideas where I could go from there, or any critique at all would be nice I don't write as much as I'd like to, I'm not that good at it tbh, so please be kind Thanks alot
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