#1
Hey guys, thanks for all the comments

This is now the FINAL piece and we've started recording it, I'll post a link when it's finished. What do you all think?


Happiest Goodbye


Verse 1:

We're tired of listening
To all of your excuses
There's a million more reasons
Why we all think you're useless, anyway

We've spent so many hours
Entertaining your nonsence
Now the future is ours
Our patience has been gone since yesterday

Chorus:

So Get out, get out
We don't need you no more
Leave us, alone
Get your arse out that door

Get out, get out
We don't need you I'm sure
Leave us alone
We've seen your type before

Verse 2:

With all the time that we've invested
And all the things that you conceive
Why do you think we didn't protest it
When you said you wanted to leave, yesterday?

It's all your arrogance and the way
You walk around as if you're famous
Now we're glad to see the back of you
And who the hell could blame us, anyway?

Bridge:

Time after time
You decided to use us
You crossed the line
And now we're blowing fuses!

Chorus
Last edited by ozzysworld at Jan 20, 2009,
#2
change arse to ass it doesnt cheapen the song. i like the overall song but its a tad short
#3
Quote by famous1234
change arse to ass it doesnt cheapen the song. i like the overall song but its a tad short


Same, but overall pretty good for a first song
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#4
Sigh, you Americans... its "arse" over here.


anyhooo, quick shot here...
"To all you excuses"
grammer.

and, random capitalization?
#5
Hey guys, thanks for the comments

I've made a couple of ajustments and added a final verse to make the song a little longer.

Improvements?


Happiest Goodbye


Verse 1:

We're tired of listening
To all of your excuses
There's a million more reasons
Why we all think you're useless, anyway

We've spent so many hours
Entertaining your nonsence
Now the future is ours
Our patience has been gone since yesterday

Chorus:

So Get out, get out
We don't need you no more
Leave us, alone
Get your arse out that door

Get out, get out
We don't need you I'm sure
Leave us alone
We've seen your type before


Verse 2:

No more holding us back
And I swear its no lie
That this whole thing has ended with
My happiest goodbye

Bridge:

Time after time
You decided to use us
You crossed the line
And now we're blowing fuses!

Chorus
#7
i like it, but i cant really put a tune to it...
what were you going for? (band, genre...)

comment on my song "prisoner" please!!
Speak the truth and speak 'ever
Cost it what it will
For he who hide the wrong he did
Did the wrong thing still