#1
Crit for Crit as always I will return the favor this ones about a fight me and a close friend thats a girl had before one of my gigs and i wrote my feelings on the topic in this song.
ok last time i put a descrption of how the song went in my head and i think that helped people understand it more however this one is much simpler
it starts out with a simple verse progression then explodes in the chorus with distortion and do the same with the other verse and chorus but from the last chorus to the variation it builds then abruptly stops after the last lyrics
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I'm taking my time, sometimes life moves to fast
And am I wasting my time thinking of you
Sometimes when you look hard you see something that you didn't see before,
and now I know things will never be the same again
So kiss the past goodbye, it means nothing now
As the days do go by I start to realize it's not worth it

So yes I know that you knew that it wouldn't last
And that you had, one hand on me while the other was on the door handle
Yeah maybe, I got a little caught up in the moment,
but don't blame me, no, we'll talk after the show

I'm taking my time, sometimes life moves to fast
as people pass me by I'm wondering if I'm wasting my time
Sometimes things start small,
and then grow into something you didn't believe was possible
No, things will never be the same again
What's done is done, and I'll let it be, it's come down to sympathy now

So yes I know, that you knew that it wouldn't last
And that you had, one hand on me while the other was on the door handle
Yeah maybe, I got a little caught up in the moment,
but don't blame me, no, we'll talk after the show

So yeah I know, that it has gone far beyond our control
And that I am also to blame, well maybe we'll find a way around this
Say what you say, and I'll do what I do
Don't leave me just yet, oh, we'll talk after the show
Last edited by zchavez09 at Jan 20, 2009,
#3
very good peice i do agree with grayelbows about the word "know" but other then that its great

C4C ?
we're all fake until we choose to die
poisoned by love and twisted lie's
#4
'Live' in the 1st line 1st para is different to 1st line of 3rd para 'life' in case of typo
sorry to jump on the band wagon, but despite the title and it being important in the chorus 'I know' is in there alot, maybe replace it with 'i feel' etc for variation between the last two choruses

on a side note, where it goes
"Sometimes things start small,
and then grow into something you didn't believe was possible"
would be an easy place for some word painting with a crecendo and diminuendo for expression through dynamics