#1
This is a more serious song

Verse 1
Why did you have to leave today
My passions lost and gone away
Your eyes were always filled with tears
I heard your voice ring in my ears
I never thought this dream would last
We took our lives way to fast
So how will you sleep tonight
When your smile shines so bright

Chorus
How can I live without your love
I'll be the hawk, babe you be the dove
Tonight, you knw you look so fine
And your lips taste sweeter than wine
So I'll just wish you the best
My heart is about to leave my chest
Lets try again another way
Your skies are blue and mine are gray
Do you need me like I want you
Your answers long overdue

Verse 2
Can you look into my eyes
And tell me that your not surprised
I ended this so soon again
Well you know we'll still be friends
You let my love consume your soul
When you lost all control
Why won't I just be a man
Like when this relationship began

Chorus

Verse 3
When did your love become untrue
You know that I could see right through
Your fake personality
To all your insecurities
I know you were always afraid
Your fears were like hand gernades
I just wanted to keep you safe
Instead my words killed you like a strafe

Chorus

Outro
So lets give love a chance
I want to continue this romance
It feels like time is standing still
Have you ever felt this thrill
Lets try to abstain
From these feelings of disdain
I want to live my life
But all we do is live this strife
#2
dude, you already posted this song. if you want people to crit it, critique their pieces (put some effort into it, not just "i liked it ok c4c?") and then leave a link in your signature to your piece. i'm compelled to report this second posting.

*reported*
#3
Not bad, I think the last part of outro is a little forced :

Lets try to abstain
From these feelings of disdain
I want to live my life
But all we do is live this strife


But I could be wrong (I often am :S) anyways i liked your piece, I can relate to it very much so. Lot of problems in the camp, was this based on personal experience (dont have to answer of course)

EDIT : sorry hadn't noticed it was posted twice :S!