#1
Hey UG well heres another song anything i can do or advice for writing will be much appreciated

You always eased the pain
You never stopped the bleeding
You once stopped the rain
But once again im dreaming
Caught up in all those filthy lie’s
And now I can see that train
Putting a timer on our lives

Heartless you see, I know it’s true
Now soulless all thanks to you
Im a fake moving at my own pace
Fake as that smile plastered on my face
Anger seeping through my solid demise
Tears seeping through my heartless eyes

You test my every move in every way
And now there’s no way I could ever stay
Because you’re the reason ill be buried in the ground
Alive, without making a single sound
I couldn’t be real if I had a chance everyday
It runs through my head, but still here I lay

Heartless you see, I know it’s true
Now soulless all thanks to you
Im a fake moving at my own pace
Fake as that smile plastered on my face
Anger seeping through my solid demise
Tears seeping through my heartless eyes

Why do I still breathe when that’s all I am?
Always trying my hardest to do all I can
But it’s never enough I still can’t be true
Its not even real, im nothing to you
It’s like saying a thousand goodbyes
It’s when no one can hear my pleading cries

Now you know its all you
The reason it’s like this
The reason im not true
It’s my heartless eyes
My heartless eyes so blue
we're all fake until we choose to die
poisoned by love and twisted lie's
#2
Overall I like this piece, my favorite bit has to be the end of chorus. I think it's really strong, fantastic, others may disagree mind you.

Everything seems to fit, only problem I can see is that the subject might be a bit cliched, I know evryone is prone to it, but still good work! Keep it up!