#1
My best lyrics to date. Any comments would be great thanks.


(V1)
I’m counting to ten in my head trying to keep my mind working,
I know it has a habit of pulling apart everything,
Tiny little fears that only come out when I’m trying to sing,
My eyes are flooding so much now it’s starting to sting.

(B)
I try to look into the future,
All I can see is darkness,
I can only look back,
And all my roses are turning black.

(V2)
My brains ticking over so quick its starting to feel like I’m drowning,
I can’t stand the thought that its hope I’m abandoning,
This has been going on so long, baby, I’m aching,
And the fire inside is about to start burning.

(B)

(C)
And if I cry right here, right now,
I know I won’t be able to stop myself,
Please don’t tell me coz I know,
Every single chance I get I just blow,
I don’t expect to trust me,
Coz I still don’t know if I trust myself,
I’ve lost something I can’t find,
The rains in my eyes, I’m starting to go blind.

(V3)
Its only when I start to slow down it feels like its crushing me,
No one can hear me screaming, I know I’ll never be free,
Like a shadow looming over me, no matter how hard I plea,
Please tell me why you can’t see, why no one ever sees!

(B)

(C)

(V4)
I can’t break free from the independence,
And right now it’s killing me,
I feel like I need to be alone,
But I want you there with me,
Am I making any sense to you?
I can’t break free from the independence,
And right now it’s killing me,
I feel like I need to be alone,
But I want you there with me,
WHY AM I NOT MAKING SENSE?

(C) x2

(V1)


(C) Copyright Alix Thomas 2009
#2
"Please don’t tell me coz I know,
Every single chance I get I just blow,"

I think the flow's a little strange in these two lines, you could fix it by removing "just".
Despite a couple of little mistakes here and there, I really liked this set, I'd like to hear it put to music

Have a look at "Bad Trip/Split Lip" if you have a minute, links in my sig
#3
i like this peice i can really relate to it im not to sure if its good or bad but maybe try and rhyme less ? but i only say that because im not sure what kinf of music this is but either way great job
C4C ?
we're all fake until we choose to die
poisoned by love and twisted lie's