#1
Hi all!
This is the first song i've recorded, i know it's pretty low quality, i just used the equipment i had. the drums were done in fruity loops and everything else was done through a usb turntable input jack into cool edit pro. I'm pretty much a guitar/drums noob, i usually just play bass but this was pretty fun.
Just looking for some critique. Let me know what you think. Thanks!!

http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/theevilpenguin/
also myspace
It's called "Manipulation in 'His' Name." Lyrics are up too.
(the other ones are just me having fun in fruity loops..feel free to critique those too )

Thanks!!
#2
this isnt too bad. the vocals and bass i like. The guitar needs a little more tone. and the drums need more cymbals lol. pretty good altogether as your first song
5150 III 100W, Mesa 4x12 Cab, Framus Cobra Cab, M-Audio Profire 610, ISA One Pre, SC607-b, Equator D5's, Countryman Type 85 Di box, Radial JCR, Superior Drummer, SSD 4 Ex, TS9, NS-2 and the list goes on and on
#3
I enjoyed it, the only issues I have would be the mixing, the drums nd the bass are a tad too loud, or the guitars are quite quiet. The song is a bit on the short side, but none of these are catastrophic errors, not bad for someone who claims to be a noob :P

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1054104 <-- thats if you fancy checking out my rough drafts of songs