Ever thing i seem to wright turns out to sound like a rap im trying to write a mix between
heavy metal and grudge just basically every thing and they words seem to go together like a rap ill give you an example off the top of my head

umm.. a course

lacking what they behold my future i cant control
were dieing before were old falling to lake of souls

the man i wish to be..is right in front of me
some one help me please I cant control me.

and i have worse ones i just cant remember how they go lol
well some one help!!!
Experiment. Try writing lyrics to the melody of a favorite metal song of yours.
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uh, try writing in a different pattern
like you have 2 lines back to back that rhyme with eachother
try something like ABAB
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Weird....I read that and thought of a kinda slow metal/hard rock song.
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...did you perform the rape while he was alive or after the heinous killing?
Maybe try writing without any melody in mind. Depending on the writing, the pace of the words might not speak to the content.
it probably sounds like a rap to you because of the couplet rhyme scheme.
in any case, this is the wrong forum. try reposting in the techniques subforum.