#1
“I Like Cats”

We’re stereotypical
But that’s ok with us
We don’t read books
We shout and we cuss
We don’t try to
match your ideals
We just go on doing
Whatever that we feel

We don’t watch the news
We could care less
We’re all care free
We don’t believe in stress
We are immature
But you knew this
We are still young
But We’re not stupid

You conceptions are
Exaggerations
You Think That were
Stupid and rebellious
We’ve got a reason
You’ve got no rhyme
Everyone is convinced
That having fun’s a crime

You try to intervene
But there’s no problem
So stop trying to help us
Before you become one
We don’t hate everyone
Actually we’re quite fond
It’s not that we smell bad
We just don’t belong

You conceptions are
Exaggerations
You think that were
Stupid and rebellious
We’ve got a reason
You’ve got no rhyme
Everyone is convinced
That having fun’s a crime

We don’t aspire to
Sell drugs on the street
But we don’t like to
Be quite and discreet
We find humor in
More things than not
We just don’t agree with
things we’ve been taught

You conceptions are
Exaggerations
You think that were
Stupid and rebellious
We’ve got a reason
You’ve got no rhyme
Everyone is convinced
That having fun’s a crime
#2
Perhaps a good idea but still rough on the edges. I believe that you abused the "We are...You are, We do ... You do, We could....".
Somehow this reminded me of that song Jellicle songs for jellicle cats from the musical...Hmm. Anyway I feel you might want to check that out.
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#3
I liked this piece a lot and didnt really see anything wrong with it I liked the message in it, and I really liked the chours, if you dont mind criting Enter the Abyss in my sig I would appericate it
#5
You conceptions are
Exaggerations
You think that were
Stupid and rebellious
We’ve got a reason
You’ve got no rhyme
Everyone is convinced
That having fun’s a crime

too cheesy.
you are taking lines from another song. does not work well for this song
#6
i liked this piece it was a good idea and very honest and got the message across well. but i think you really did overuse the sentence structure, like maybe try having a different rhythm for the chorus to make it a bit less monotonous, and also you could try not just reapeating the same chorus again and again, try changing it each time just a little to keep the listener/reader interested. Good work though.

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