#1
It's all acoustic stuff and it fits rhythmically with the guitar part, what do you think of it? I kinda think I should add a verse because the song is short right now but I don't know...

It’s a bittersweet life and I’m livin it strong
There are thoughts in my head that I've doin it wrong
And here with you I got nothing to lose
But I’m losing this game and I’m losin you
Solace had come from the notion of love
And I feel it was lost amidst the clouds above

(Some Ooohs would go here)

Well I should just move on and uh live my life
But there are thoughts in my head that keep me up all night
Well in my eyes there can be no harm
But you say there is so I’ll sing this song
About two lost souls and their open arms
That will never meet but were meant to be

(More Ooohs and a mini-solo)

It’s a bittersweet life and I’m livin it strong
There were thoughts in my head i was doin it wrong
And there with you I had nothing to lose
But I’ve lost that game and I lost you
My Music:
Solo project: myspace.com/dermy3blkaht
Full band (iRockit): myspace.com/nj136
#2
its a good song i liked it but with the first verse the last to line don't seem to belong i could be wrong or i might be reading it wrong but it when to a rhyme on one thing and the rhyme changed with the last lines i don't know maybe I'm wrong what kind of sound you going for?

C4C..https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1056526
Last edited by gord69961 at Jan 28, 2009,
#3
I'm unsure of how to describe it, it's just me and a guitar singing really, nothing complex...
My Music:
Solo project: myspace.com/dermy3blkaht
Full band (iRockit): myspace.com/nj136
#4
ya i can kinda get what u mean nice song man ill keep
cheaking up will you upload it when done
#5
I shall...
My Music:
Solo project: myspace.com/dermy3blkaht
Full band (iRockit): myspace.com/nj136