#1
As I woke up in a hot sweat

Beads of power on my mind

Looking at my friends and wondering which exit will be mine


I make my way to the window

Looking out to hear what’s past

Knowing now, that later, my memories will pass


No more reasons in my mind

No more thoughts I left behind

The class of A my friend has found a home and won’t leave me behind


These dark clouds I feel before me

Hiding truths and dares or not

I can’t help wondering, is it ever gonna stop


I think I know now why I do it

The fun, the criac , the sex , the pain

I can’t wait till the weekend and I’ll do it all again.
#2
I think it should be 'wake' in the first line, not 'woke'.

I couldn't really gather what this was about, it seemed alright though.
#3
have you never woke up in a strangers house after a hard night out and feel like the song says?????
#4
ya same ^ dont really get it, and its present tense so it is 'wake'
uhm rhymes seem a little weak, mind with mine, past with pass, and behind with... behind.
work on less obvious rhymes and rhyming schemes and you'll be on the right track
#5
No, I've never woken up in a strangers house before, and I don't ever plan to.

And yeah, I didn't notice it at first, but I have to agree with stephen_rettie about the rhyming. There could be other things I havn't picked up, should be off to bed.
#7
*reported* read the faqs man.

limit to one piece a day, two a week and all pieces need to be titled (or at the very least "untitled")

this will probably get closed.
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