#1
This is a song I literally wrote in 5 minutes.
I'm still working on the breakdown though.
Verses are screamed, chorus is sung.
Anything in parenthesese is screamed.
Let me know what you think!

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Hating You Completes Me

You left so long ago / and I've never felt so cold.
I never knew you / and you never were a part of my life.
I grew up hating you / for all that you've done and I still do!

Look at me now,
I'm four times the man you ever were,
Or could even hope to be.
(I hope you feel hurt,
and that now you see,
Hating you completes me.)

Growing up / I had to deal with all of this.
You disgust me / You're a waste of a soul.
I'm glad you left / I'm so much better alone!

Look at me now,
I'm four times the man you ever were,
Or could even hope to be.
(I hope you feel hurt,
and that now you see,
Hating you completes me.)

[Breakdown]


Look at me now,
I'm four times the man you ever were,
Or could even hope to be.
(I hope you feel hurt,
and that now you see,
Hating you completes me.)

Look at me now,
I'm four times the man you ever were,
Or could even hope to be.
(I hope you feel hurt,
and that now you see,
Hating you completes me.)

Look at me now!
Last edited by Vicious [S7VN] at Jan 30, 2009,
#2
i think the first look at me now in the chorus should be screamed and your a waste of soul thats harsh...
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#6
This song has no substance at all. It's "I hate you, I hate you, You're a waste, I hate you." That's all there is to it, and it's boring. It's a stripped down "I Hate Everything About You" in a way. But it's definitely lacking. It's also kind of repetitive and just repeats the same message in a slightly different way. I don't mean to completely hate on this song you wrote but there isn't much to like to be honest.

c4c?
What if you could look right through the cracks,
Would you find yourself, find yourself afraid to see?
#7
Ok, I see where you're coming from.
Keep in mind, it was only written in 5 minutes lol.
But I will work on it and try to put more detail into it.
I was going for more of an Atreyu style of writing, but looking at it now, I failed at that.
Thanks for the comment.
#8
You songs definetly kick mines ass haha i like this one to just i find its a little to.. umm this on the first vrs and I still do! at the end sounds like your trying to put that in at the end of the screaming like it dosent belong umm..sounds forced i think
try maybe I grew up hating you / for all that you've done,[Pause] I still do
it hink it sonds good for how im hareing the songs up to you still great tho
#10
this has lots of emotion, and thats what makes a great song, nice job
#13
Do you listen to Chimaira? It seems like something they'd write.
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#15
i liked it the chorus should have the first line screamed but pretty good

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