#1
Hey guys, this is a slow song. I will be soon recording it when i figure out the chords. C4C.

Enjoy


Sensitivity


Don’t go, don’t fly
Never leave my side
I feel the right way at this point.

Don’t run, don’t hide
Never say goodbye
I want to make sure you loved me.

Whilst the rain pours down through the window
As we watch to the hill
Were we first met.

I close my eyes till the sunsets
I wipe my tears and think to myself
Think back to the day that I remember
Your sensitive care

Picture in my head where the tree would stand
Our names carved in with wood

Placed in my head as a memory
For as long as I could

But when the rain poured down
You cried until the rain stopped

I close my eyes till the sunsets
I wipe my tears and think to myself
Think back to the day that I remember
Your sensitive care

It was fate that we weren’t supposed to be together
As you leave my tender arms, please not forever
I won’t forget your face when you were taken away
The changes and the difference without us will never change

I close my eyes till the sunsets
I wipe my tears and think to myself
Think back to the day that I remember
My sensitive care

Still in painful conditions I have been through the years
This sort of change of hope has forsaken me
I know one day I’ll see you, but you won’t remember me
For my tender arms will reach you no more.
Last edited by Kom23 at Feb 2, 2009,
#2
cute little love song here. I think you should write about the special moments you two shared that aren't as common as carving your name in a tree( i have to admit you worded it pretty well though, in a non-cliche way)

I also think the title was a bit off, there was no talk about anybody being sensitive in here, it seemed like a little line you just decided to throw in the chorus. but if the word sensitive does have a special meaning for you then by all means don't change it, just write a little bit about who was/is being sensitive or a sensitive situation so that it doesn't seem like a non-needed add on there. All in all, it was nothing completely exceptional but with a little bit of work it could quite possibly be. Keep writing!!
#3
Thanks for that, must say that was great advice. I added, and changed bits and peices, i changed the last two verses, or briges either one you would like to call them. To make the song sound more sensitive not to her but to him.

Just need some more ideas, if anyone can Crit for me, and help me out more that would be great!

Thanks guys, keep thm rolling...!!