#1
"Can I go?
Can I leave?
I don't want to be here
I don't like it there
Everywhere is the wrong place

The grass is a nice green
The birds are singing in the right key
The water is clear and clean
...Right now,It's just not for me"

This my first time letting anyone read any of my songs.Go easy on me.I'm definitely not done but I just felt like posting what little I had done.
"This is Sierra-259, you got Spartans on the ground, sir. We're not going anywhere."

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#2
First off I would like to ask, What Genre is it? I don't know if i should play it in my head as Rock, Metal, Hip-hop, Rap etc.

Theres not much to say. I like it. If this is a rock song you might wanna add a screaming part saying "Let me out of here"
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"Can I go?
Can I leave?
I don't want to be here
I don't like it there
Everywhere is the wrong place

The grass is a nice green
The birds are singing in the right key
The water is clear and clean
...Right now,It's just not for me"
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"Let me out of here!" This is where it would change to the pre-chorus and then chorus.

I'm assuming this is a rock song, and if it's hip-hop or rap. Disregard this.
For future reference, put the genre in the post.
#3
I didn't actually have a genre in mind.
"This is Sierra-259, you got Spartans on the ground, sir. We're not going anywhere."

Fender Partscaster

Vox AC4TV

Korg Pitchblack Tuner
TC Electronics Nova Repeater
Electro Harmonix Big Muff Pi
MXR Micro Amp
EH Holy Grail Reverb