#1
an act of violence.

quakes of metaphorical
intelligence
drunken symposium
gentleman examination
at that quiet little house
party
and all that razzmatazz
stuffed up your ass
by the time you make
like a tree and fall
into the restroom
contracting your next
decision in the mirror.

the worst part is that
you forgot what you
were arguing about in the
first place, idiot.

can't help it
CAN'T HELP IT
if i decided to start
a little early tonight
when i got out of my
car
i grab my face and squeeze
everyone was laughing
cause my dragging feet
pushed the empty beer cans
out the floorboard of my car
when i stood up.

*knock knock*

"are you ok sweetheart?
i think you've had too much to drink...."

i answer with silence;
she said it loud enough to
make a response undeserving.
i'm not having sex with her
tonight, i'll just turn away
in the bed
while she feels bad about herself
and then we'll finally have some
harmony tonight.
There's a road that leads to the end of all suffering. You should take it.


- Jericho Caine


secret, aaaaagent maaan.
secret, aaaaagent maaan.
#4
Hm.


I'll come back to this.
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minterman22
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#6
Came back. I don't think I can properly critique this; you don't seem to be in a good place in the world. Maybe I'm reading too much into this, but if not, I'm hope you're okay, whatever may be wrong.
Quote by Arthur Curry
it's official, vintage x metal is the saving grace of this board and/or the antichrist




e-married to
theguitarist
minterman22
tateandlyle
& alaskan_ninja

#7
You've been marked. I'll be back.


EDIT: I never get tired of your writing; not for one second during or after. Life writes the best poetry and this is real man.
On the eight day we spoke back...

let there be sound.
Last edited by Billyjson at Feb 12, 2009,
#8
an act of violence.

quakes of metaphorical
intelligence
drunken symposium
gentleman examination
at that quiet little house
party
and all that razzmatazz
stuffed up your ass
i was about to smack you upside the head for all that high-brow verbage at the beginning of this. then you did a complete 180 with those two lines. nice contrast.
by the time you make
like a tree and fall
into the restroom
contracting your next
decision in the mirror.

the worst part is that
you forgot what you
were arguing about in the
first place, idiot.

can't help it
CAN'T HELP IT
if i decided to start
a little early tonight
when i got out of my
car
i grab my face and squeeze
everyone was laughing
cause my dragging feet
pushed the empty beer cans
out the floorboard of my car
when i stood up.

*knock knock*

"are you ok sweetheart?
i think you've had too much to drink...."

i answer with silence;
she said it loud enough to
make a response undeserving.
i'm not having sex with her
tonight, i'll just turn away
in the bed
while she feels bad about herself
and then we'll finally have some
harmony tonight.


you meandered about, nearly to the level of becoming annoying, then brought it home for a solid landing. well done.
Meadows
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#9
This tore at me. I've come back over and over and over again, and still, it rips at my soul. Powerful and moving.