#1
Short and sweet...Something I haven't done in about a year...OTS, c4c...or whatever


Each step I take my foot seems
to melt to the ground
Not wanting to continue
my journey to a caging hell
a condemnation for irresponsibility
My eyes can only look down
after the chains tied my wrists
Ashamed?
I am
Vivamus mea Lesbia, atque amemus,
rumoresque senum seueriorum
omnes unius aestimemus assis!
#2
WARNING ! CRAPCRIT ALERT !

Quote by Eaglestalon101


Each step I take my foot seems
to melt to the ground
Good imagery.
Not wanting to continue
my journey to a caging hell
Believe it or not, one of the first things I wrote was a "concept album" about cages
a condemnation for irresponsibility
Too long line, totally breaks the flow. But it's ots so.. who cares ?
My eyes can only look down
after the chains tied my wrists
Meh lines...
Ashamed?
I am
I like the ending.


I don't think there is a lot to say, since this is totally abstract as I see it... Trying to say you're chained to shame I guess... But overall I like it; I usually like your pieces btw, I'm just soooo lazy to crit things... Thanks for that 9.8 on mine ^^