Seth Shadows
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Join date: Sep 2006
6,719 IQ
#2
Lyrics: Some bars really bugged me; like bar 30. " I Wanna Sleep" should be something like "Please Let Me Sleep" or something. and so on.
The use of the same repetative pitches really started to get annoying to be honest.
Overall 8/10

Melody: Most of it was good. Needs a Solo though, I know there was one, I mean a better solo. (I could Write one if you wish.) All in all, everything tied together. 9/10

Complexity: Cliche a bit. Even for hardrock/hardcore. It needs an interlude.
7/10

Cure: No. Not at all actually.
It has alot of potential.
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Last edited by Seth Shadows at Feb 4, 2009,
xxCHANCExx
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Join date: Aug 2007
788 IQ
#3
I thought lyrics were good, but ya, maybe change that one line that seth said. Other than that, lyrics were fine. Gave a good message and delivered it well.
Melody was good as well. Chorus was most definitely the best part. Had a good vocal line and everything. It wasn't all that complicated and it was easy to remember, so that's a good thing.
It was pretty complex in some parts, but not too complex. I don't think it was all too cliche at all, but like the guy above said, a solo and/or interlude would be cool.
All in all it was cool. Good job.

8.5/10
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