#1
alright just thought id get some opinions on the lyrics to this song im writing. still working on them but tell me what you think:

Prisoner

They said that i was guilty
sorrow blinded them from the truth
their sense of justice gone
can you tell me what ive done wrong?

I am Innocent!
i would never do those crimes
but you still call me prisoner
for the rest of my life

no one listens to the guilty
they say we have no right
though i may be innocent
they say im guilty for my crimes

they confine me with others
that are murderers to the heart
i just dont belong here
free me from this false charge!

ohhhh

I am innocent!
i would never do those crimes
but you still call me prisoner
for the rest of my life.
#2
First verse started nicely, but then you speak of crimes. What crimes ? I think that maybe only another verse about that could really strenghtens the piece.

If you could have a look at mine in my sig, would be appreciated.
#3
'sorrow blinded them from the truth' seems a bit odd. possibly change it to something more like, 'driven mad by sorrow' or 'acting on their sorrow.' not the best example, but it might spark something. :P

'i would never do those crimes' doesn't sit well, either. what crime? maybe try to elaborate in a subtle way if that makes any sense at all. also i think it sounds better 'you'll call me prisoner,' as opposed to 'you still.'

overall it was alright, i liked it. c4c if you don't mind?

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