#1
When you think of a foreign country such as Canada or Mexico, stereotypes typically happen, it is the nature of life. Stereotypes are mainly judging people on their color and appearance rather than their personality, but if you think about it, without judging society would indefinitely be a different society, so it is the nature of people, for example America. Many countries view America as an enemy, based on our standings and beliefs. Don’t think it’s a solely hate relationship, ever since World War II America has had some strong real allies, not the one’s in it for the money because there economy is swirling the drain, I’m talking about the ones who will support a war with their troops. With the recent Iraq war only two countries have truly backed us, England and Australia, and yet we are still viewed in negative ways by the populace of these lands. With our fast food, poor economy, and less than perfect leadership in the past 8 years, we are truly the devil to some. Others might go as far to have us burned to the ground with our instant gratification and corporate holidays that feed money into the higher ups. Ever since the signing of our Declaration of Independence on the hot summer day in Pennsylvania known as our Independence Day, we have always strived to be better, taking the mistakes of our formers and learning from them, improving their methods, plastering our way as one of the great superpowers of the world. This attitude still very well exists. In every one of us, and to do this, we need to make the most out of our lives if we are to succeed with them, thus creating a need for instant gratification, a want for things now, not soon, never later, and this mindset is probably stuck in Americans heads further than their mothers maiden name. The detraction from this need is, well obviously, envy of all who can’t have what the better do. This even exists within our country, while some people might go on to bigger and better until their burial costs more than what an accountant makes in 3 years, some people will give up, knowing they won’t make it, their mindset is still the same as any others, it just isn’t ringing any bells, these are the type of people who go to work to get paid, and get hammered off a 6 pack every Saturday and Sunday while watching the game on a television. My point is, the mindset is there, and yet some people just listen to it. Frankly Americans don’t really know too much about what our English counterparts think about us across the pond, we’re mainly so obsessed about making the strive towards the success we all envy above us. It makes us want to reach the very best we can be, and the position we’re helps us to succeed with that, nothing to really push as back, nothing to keep us from growing.


Is any of this true, I just wrote it for the grade, and most of that is not my actual thoughts.
Last edited by Comrade Curry at Feb 5, 2009,
#2

Paragraphs are nice. I like them.
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#3
You need to revise the grammar in it.
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#4
My essay on your essay:

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#5
you should write a book
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#7
Is that all of it? I can't see how you can really say anything really worth while in only a couple hundred words.
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#8
essays typically need a thesis statement, paragraphs, etc...
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#9
you fail. you used a pronoun, left out punctuation, any type of structure, used contractions, etc. please do not turn that in.
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thumbs down, England and Australia arn't the only ones helping you, Germany's in Afganistan, and yes the whole world hates you...
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#13
After reading this it appears you have no idea how to write an essay. You will get a bad grade for how poorly written it is.
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#14
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This isn't for English so my teacher couldn't give any less of a ****.


Yeah well, the teacher isn't going to want to read a wall of text and have to actually think about what you're saying because bad grammar makes even the best of ideas really hard to comprehend.
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#15
How old are you? No professor would ever accept that regardless of the class. Even a high school teacher wouldn't lose sleep over failing that.
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Yeah well, the teacher isn't going to want to read a wall of text and have to actually think about what you're saying because bad grammar makes even the best of ideas really hard to comprehend.


Dude where is my improper grammar? Print out the essay and highlight it.
#18
This is your Social Studies teacher Billy. You fail Billy.
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Quote by Comrade Curry
Dude where is my improper grammar? Print out the essay and highlight it.


Double Edit: No. This is too hard. I'm not gonna waste my time on this. Sorry. But you should have paid attention in 9th grade when they taught you how to write an essay.
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#20
bad mistake posting it on the internet it could be used as palgerism now, there is a program my english teacher uses and it shows your paper and papers similar to it on the internet, if your teacher uses it then this will show up...
#21
Quote by Comrade Curry
Dude where is my improper grammar? Print out the essay and highlight it.


read my post. i pointed out a some general flaws.
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bad mistake posting it on the internet it could be used as palgerism now, there is a program my english teacher uses and it shows your paper and papers similar to it on the internet, if your teacher uses it then this will show up...


I'll just delete my OP to ensure that the evidence is concealed.
#23
Quote by Comrade Curry
This isn't for English so my teacher couldn't give any less of a ****.


So it doesn't matter that you said "there" instead of "their" and such things?

Just trying to help.

EDIT: ^^ Someone should quote it for 'teh lulz', and so you get extra bonus points for plagiarism!
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#24
It's just terribly written: a lot of awkward sentences, confusing punctuation, loads of generalities and nothing in the way of interesting detail. Honestly, I got through the first 6 or so sentences and couldnt' stand reading any more. I don't care what class it is for, it's not passing work.

I try not to be completely negative, but come on.
#25
Quote by Comrade Curry
This isn't for English so my teacher couldn't give any less of a ****.


My english teacher is actually the one who cares least about structure, all my social teachers are the ones that are most anal about creating 'a proper academic paper'. High school isn't there for you to learn things, it's there so that you can develop good studying and writing skills (among other things) and one of the most notable of these is how to write a well structured, convincing paper.

Why do you think you're writing these papers? Your teacher doesn't care about your opinions, they aren't there to be inspired by you.
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#26
That paper blew man.

Other than the grammar, wording that made you sound like a hick, and use of coloquialisms in a paper, it was innacurate.

Try again?
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#28
to be honest I couldn't read it. Try and cut up some of those run-ons, and a paragraph never hurt anybody.


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