#1
Why bother burning the flag,
When it’s all well and good as is?
Stick and stones and broken bones,
Let’s use them to our advantage.

Oh, baby devil,
Sing your song like you know what it means,
Oh, baby devil,
Don’t be so naïve.

We’ll drive you off the side of your street,
To deliver our symbol of peace,
Your dramatization will not drag us down,
You can take the horse to the water,
but you can’t make it drown.

Oh, baby devil,
Sing your song like you know what it means,
Oh, baby devil,
Don’t be so naïve.

When a man’s got a gun,
But the war has been won,
The bullets aren’t gonna last,
When the sun tumbles down,
No more light to be found,
Too many days this shadow has been cast.
I'm here to help

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ok, as usual pit is being very unhelpful except andychalmers, so im gonna go post this someplace else


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#2
Baby Devil
(nice title for a song, a good start )

Why bother burning the flag,
When it’s all well and good as is?
Stick and stones and broken bones,
Let’s use them to our advantage.

(Hmmm, it's got a good flow and it's pretty original, i like the third line. But there doesn't seem to be any meaning... i'm not sure what you're trying to say maybe you could try to make the meaning a bit clearer, but as far as a song goes i can imagine it being good.)

Oh, baby devil,
Sing your song like you know what it means, (wish i did)
Oh, baby devil,
Don’t be so naïve.

(Nice chorus, once again a nice flow, but i'm not really sure how it ties in with the first stanza or what you're trying to put forward, nothing wrong with that though.)

We’ll drive you off the side of your street,
To deliver our symbol of peace,
Your dramatization will not drag us down,
You can take the horse to the water,
but you can’t make it drown.

(i really like this, some nice images, is it about war, like the gulf war or something like that? or is it a bit more vague?)

Oh, baby devil,
Sing your song like you know what it means,
Oh, baby devil,
Don’t be so naïve.

When a man’s got a gun,
But the war has been won,
The bullets aren’t gonna last,
When the sun tumbles down,
No more light to be found,
Too many days this shadow has been cast.

(this doesn't seem a very strong ending, the last line is good, but as a whole stanza it could be better, the flow isn't quite right, and i don't like the third line)

All in all i can see this being a very good song, it's just a bit vague and ambiguous in parts, but hell that's not necessarily a bad thing. Nice work though, Kudos.

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