You really need to add some variety to the song, it feels kinda dull and repetitive to be honest. What I'd do is add another guitar and put some licks and harmonies to complement the first one. Also, I'd change the drum pattern in the second verse; yours is not bad, but it just goes on untill the end of the song, I'd just use it for the chorus.

By the way, here's a song of mine; I'd appreciate your critique

I'm with Creeping.death on this one. The song is generally repetitive. Try having more riffs that are just a variation of the clean riff and something that isn't just strumming chords. As a bassist myself I'd say do something a little more involved with the bass . Oh, and also the point that Creeping.death made about drums, make them do something different, cause it gets repetitive.

crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1062341