#1
Deathcoreish thing i made
about zombies

"I lie here ****ing restless
Cremation could not subdue ----> maybe "A Burial could not Subdue"
I long to taste sweet air once more
This hunger will not refuse

Im clawing at my coffin
Blood under my fingernails
I taste the worms and maggots
Beneith six feet of shale

Chorus
Abomination you now see
Is all that is whats left of me
Once man now broken into fiend
Reduced to filth, ugly, obscene

Im Boiling down to nothing
My blood evaporates
Incinerate my carcass
throw my ashes down the grate

Now skulk inside the sewers
I'll rule under your feet
Reamerging every full moon
Hunting down your flesh to eat
Oh,
Abomination you now see
Is all that is whats left of me
Once man now broken into fiend
Reduced to filth, ugly, obscene

AH!
And now im free to rip and maim
Roaming these shadows i have taimed
Decrepid skin and my disease
As night echos with hallowed screams
Murder has come. ----> i might change this to 'NOW RISE WITH THE DEAD!'

Abomination you now see
Is all that is whats left of me
Once man now broken into fiend
Reduced to filth, ugly, obscene

Obscene!
Obscene!
Murder has come. -----> Now rise with the dead! ?

Edit:
Thanks for all the comments , please comment on weither you like the first or second options on those two spots :P
Last edited by BMTHTaylor at Feb 16, 2009,
#7
Not Bad! I love the zombie theme, I tried it once but it turned out really cheesy. Props to you for making it sound cool and dark with minimal hokieness
#12
Im not a big fan of this sort of music but i like your description and i would love to hear this as a song. I can totally imagine the pace suddenly quickening as the zombie breaks out .
The chorus is the best bit but im not to keen on the ending. It seems a bit too cheesy maybe something like " The feast has begun"

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#13
Quote by BMTHTaylor
Deathcoreish thing i made
about zombies

"I lie here ****ing restless
Cremation could not subdue


If you burn a zombie it's going to die. Use something other than cremation.
#14
Quote by Hesh
If you burn a zombie it's going to die. Use something other than cremation.


I thought of that but i didnt really care :P
In earlier drafts i had "A burial can not subdue"
Might change back to that i guess
Last edited by BMTHTaylor at Feb 15, 2009,
#15
when you play it in the show. Its got to be obvious that you scream those lyrics right?

Just can't really picture the last 3 words. Are you like holding the scream or what you doing with the

Obscene
Obscene
Murder has come.

I hate that last phrase....
sounds so... gay... no offense.
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#16
Quote by Demarkos
when you play it in the show. Its got to be obvious that you scream those lyrics right?

Just can't really picture the last 3 words. Are you like holding the scream or what you doing with the...



Well we have played this song 3 times live. and we usually just did a full band yell kinda thing for obscene x2 then i just screamed murder has come when we practice. i agree though.. im thinking of changing it to maybe like.. "now rise with the dead" or something i like that better
Last edited by BMTHTaylor at Feb 16, 2009,
#17
my band and i have decided to record this actually so possibly posting the finished product here for you guys to hear if interested