#1
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Each sunny morning on a bright summers day
I pull out my guitar the babes come to play
I sing them your song they all sing along
In the right key but the harmony's wrong

I played you these chords while we were laying in bed
'Cause i just had to get those feelings out of my head
I wrote you this song and you hummed along
In the right key but that time is now gone

I found me a bass and a man of the drums
And spent many a-year perfecting my strum
I played them your song each one played along
In the right key but the feeling is wrong

I've travelled the states and crowds stopped to see
The man with the story but that man is just me
I sang them your song they all chant along
In the right key but the message is wrong

Now i dream of a day that I will see you again
And I'll look in your eyes and you'll remember when
I sang you this song the tears came along
In the right key but something was wrong

Now i dream of a day that you will be here with me
But I just dont think thats a possibility
I still play your song when i feel alone
In the right key but my love is gone
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It's just me and Doris here ;_;



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#2
It's not bad. i really like the lyrics. however i find it a bit of boring. it's always the same with just different words. try to make it different in the chorus and int he end.

liek the sentence ''But I just dont think thats a possibility'' in the last verse. i think it would sounds great if you talked that sentence. thats just my opinion tough.

Care to crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1065319
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-Schecter Tempest Custom
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#3
wow i seriously love this!

i would really love to hear this recorded and i would definetly buy it too =]

the whole feel of the song somewhat spoke to me, the message was perfectly clear and the way you would tie in the ending to ever stanza was amazing.

great job!

C4c?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=18574306#post18574306
#4
wow thanks alot DearGirlLoveMe!! i really appreciate that.. ill have to let you know when i get more up (very soon)

Trecion ive been told "the chords need more variation"

though to be honest i didnt write this one with a chorus.. its straight verse.


ill crit both of yalls
Quote by King Twili
It's just me and Doris here ;_;



Quote by Zaphikh
Poops is the chat MC - but here we know him as Early Cuyler.


Free Downloads, Yo!